Module 8 revising

To revise a paper you must read it and correct the errors. You simply reread what you have written and think about the sentence structure, the organization and the spelling errors. When you reread your paper you need to read it as if you did not originally write it. When we reread our own writing we tend to be bias and over past any weirdly worded sentence or organization. It is best to take some time after you finish writing your paper before you reread and revise it. It isn’t suggested to do your revision while everything is still so fresh in your mind.

When you revise your paper you need to look for spelling or punctuation errors. Sentence structure and overall organization are very important things to notice as you revise your paper. 

Module 7

  • Take a look at the student draft beginning on page 579. Find an example of how the writer incorporates a quote. In a post on your blog, identify the quote  and discuss how well you think it was or was not incorporated and why. (You can also see how this writer approached quotes on page 571. It’s a good example of how to approach the brief assignment.)

“the mechanics undoubtedly saw that i am as ignorant about cars as Ralph Bulmer was about rocks, and that I could not understand their explanation”(201)


the student was able to successfully integrate this quote into a sentence that both goes back to the purpose and the audience. I found this quote use very appealing because of the fact that is brought up the reason for tying it back to the purpose but also it explained the quote in a way that is easy for the reader to understand. The student compared the quote used to the every day live of anyone.

  • Post a progress report on your Draft 1.1. What text will you examine? What is your working thesis? What elements of the text will you focus on in your analysis? And finally, what questions or concerns do you have about the Draft 1.1? This will probably take the bulk of your time this module, but it will be worth it.

With the technology of today international communication has become much faster, with the use of Juxtaposition, examples, and statistics, Budiansky communicates the idea to businessmen whom may be interested in this translating software that there are both satisfying and dissatisfying factors. This sentence will be my working thesis and i plan on focusing on the statistics that Budiansky uses to show that these translators aren’t 100 % accurate one-hundred percent of that time. I also plan on bring out the examples that he uses to show the level of error in some of the translations. I don’t have to many questions for the most part, I think I have set out a pretty good plan on my first draft and I am looking forward to getting some feedback.

Module 6

This post is late because I wasn’t able to see the module every time I looked throughout the week.

I have chosen the focus on the text by Stephen Budiansky, “Lost in Translation.” I felt that this text was the only one that I completely understood the purpose and audience for. After getting the results back on a past Brief Assignment i realized there were a few things in the other texts that i over looked. I was originally leaning towards “Everyone Speaks Text Message” by Tina Rosenberg but realized I was not as familiar as I thought I was with it. 

A few things to consider in order to build a strong thesis statement;

  • Is it potentially interesting to the intended audience
  • Is it as specific as possible
  • It limits the topic enough to make it manageable

The thesis serves as a sentence that lets the reader become a little familiar with what they are about to read along with the purpose of the author.

Module Four; Responding to the Text

On your blog, post a reaction to the text you have chosen. 


As I read through “Everyone speaks Texts Message” Tina Rosenberg didn’t have to convince me of much. I agreed with a lot of the things she said and the subject actually got my attention. I found the N’Ko history that Rosenburg used very interesting. Now that these facts have been brought to light for me it actually made me think about the process it would take to potentially try to preserve hundreds of languages. I think an intended audience for this text is the average college student. A college student whom doesn’t typically realize that there are people out there who can only communicate by speaking while we are blessed with the luxuries of texting, internet and books. By including the story of how Traore communicated with his family before and after this digital technology, Rosenburg was effective in appealing to the audiences emotionally.


On your blog, list at least five rhetorical choices that the writer has made and give an example of each from the text.


1. Proof of over-empowerment to engage the reader.

          “For years, the Web’s lingua franca was English. Speakers of French, Hindi and Urdu, Arabic, Chinese and Russian chafed at the advantage the Internet gave not only the American pop culture but also its language.” (pp. 267, p. 1)

2. The perspective of Traore’s childhood.

          “When Traore was born, N’Ko had already been in use for several years. But growing up , he did not know it existed.” (pp.268, p. 4)

 3. Joyful tone

          “For many tiny, endangered languages, digital technology has become a lifeline.” (pp. 268, p. 3)

4. Contradiction

          “But for hundreds of heritage languages, a four-inch bar of plasic and battery and motherboard is the future of the past” (pp. 271, p.23)

          “For many tiny, endangered languages, digital technology has become a lifeline.” (pp. 268, p. 3)

5. Statistics

          “The United Nations put the rate of adult literacy at 39 percent, but that figure counts mostly those who live in major cities—in rural areas, it is much lower.

Module Four; Questions about the reading. (looking at the reading rhetorically)

reading for content

  • What do you find confusing or unclear about the text? Where can you look for explanations or more information? Do you need background information in order to understand fully?

I am a little unclear a to what the author believe about technology and its effects on the preservation of languages. At times he seems hopefull and provides evidence where technology as simple as text messaging has helped preserve the endangered languages. Towards the end of the text the author makes it obvious that for all of these heritage languages, the cell phone is “the future of the past.” Meaning, we can not make enough cheep cell phones in hundreds of different languages to preserve these languages

  • What key terms and ideas—or key patterns—do you see? What key images stick in your mind?

I repeatedly saw the image of these third world countries with their own languages using cell phones and texting in their own language.

  • What sources or other works does this text cite, refer to, or allude to?
  • How does the content fit with what you already know?

My generation knows almost everthing there is to know about technology and with what I am familiar with, that everyone I know has phones, the content fits because I can imagine how it would be for just anyone to be able to have a phone and text in the language they speak every day.

  • Which points do you agree with? Which do you disagree with? Why?

I agree with the initial argument that once technology began to grow it favored the English language making it hard for those that lived in the middle of technology and traditional culture. It gave too much andvantages to the English speakers and none to the French, Chinese and Russians.

reading for author/creator and audience

  • Do the authors or creators present themselves as you anticipated in your preview?


  • For what audience was this text created? Are you part of its intended audience?

I believe the intended audience is anyone who is interested in the small cultures around the world. College level students or even a few years older and younger because we understand technology and we are also old enough to understand the struggles cultures might ace with not having a written language.

  • What underlying assumptions can you identify in the text?

I believe it is assumed that the audience knows about technology and how it has grown and the potential struggles with tring to do something as big as specially making hundreds of phones that’s have defaulted endangered languages.

  • Are the medium and genre appropriate for the topic, audience, and purpose?


reading for design, composition, and style

  • Is the design appropriate for the subject and genre?


  • Does the composition serve a purpose—for instance, does the layout help you see what is more and less important in the text?

Yes and no. I feel like all of the facts layed out are sufficient but with the back and forth perspective and story changed it gets a little confusing.

  • Do words, images, sound, and other media work together well?

Yes, very.

  • How would you describe the style of the text? What contributes to this impression—word choice? references to research or popular culture? formatting?color? something else?

The word choices were very easily understood, there weren’t a lot of college level words used making it an easy read for anyone as young as high school level. The technological references were very sufficient to help draw that line between the small and large cultures.

Module Three; Applying the Reading

  • You will find that you will need to learn how to summaries of various lengths. For your blog, write a 1-2 sentence summary of each text listed in brief assignment two. Then reflect on the process. Did you find it difficult? Easy? Why? Then pick one text — I recommend using the text that you write over for brief assignment two — and write a 200-300 word summary. Then, once again reflect on the process. Was this easier or more difficult than the 1-2 sentence summary? How did you decide what to leave in? What to leave out?

1. As time has evolved books to electronic communication, the transition of the language is evident. In many instances it is obvious that language has changed with technology and time.

2.  Stephen Budiansky compares communication as a “talking dog” and goes on to explain the difficulties associated with translations between languages over technology. Although, programs have been developed to rephrase and to translate the pure meaning without the extra details, much information is still lost.

3.  A teacher assigns essays to students where they actually have to plagiarize. As a lesson, this teacher’s assignment brings out many questions in the students minds.

4. In many ways technology has served to help preserve languages and keep people in touch. While many small languages never had an actual written form of their language, technology has help them to actually form one.

          I wasn’t too hard to come up with 1-2 very very vague sentences to summarizes these reading. For the simple purpose of summarizing the readings 1-2 sentence was efficient but with 1-2 sentences you aren’t able to get any details at all in. 

          Ibrahima Traore speaks, writes and reads in many different languages. He deals mostly with a language called N’Ko, a language of his native family. People noticed that once technology increased the smaller less popular languages started to die off. This was a result of English being the main language for the internet and other forms of technology.  When Traore was little, N’Ko had existed for several years but he had never seen a written for of the language. As cultures slowly began to grow with their languages they created written forms and this text made communication much easier.  People transformed their own written forms of their language and used them in emails. Next thing people knew this language of N’Ko was everywhere. There were websites developed in it and DVDs had the option for subtitles in N’Ko as well. This language along with many other little languages has grown as a result of technology. People were losing their forms of communication as a result of not having it in a written form. Technology gave people the opportunity to create a written form of their own language, in turn making communication so much easier.

          I personally think a full summary with 200-300 words is easier to summarize a passage. With longer summaries you have more opportunities to explain in detail a few of the main parts. Summaries need all the main parts but I think they need a few small details to just to avoid complete vagueness.  


          It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair. – Charles Dickens, A Tale of Two Cities (1859)

          There were great things happening, there were horrible things happening, people were knowledgeable, people were senseless, it was a time of certainty, it was a time of doubt, it was a season of brightness, it was a season of darkness, it was a spring of optimism, it was a winter of sorrow.

          I don’t think paraphrasing this particular sentence was to hard because I just rephrased what was already said. 

Module Three; Responce to Writing

  • Write a response to the readings you have done. What are the most important concepts? What did you find helpful? What did you find confusing? Answering these questions will help anchor the concepts in your mind.

A few concepts that I found helpful was the fact that the response that the author is looking for I strictly up to the reader. How the author chooses and arranges the evidence will prove how successful the readers’ response is.  The response that the author is looking for helps mold the strategy they use when writing. I also found it helpful to know that by discovering the genre, purpose and the intended audience you can learn and analyze the writing. These three things are called rhetorical context. Using rhetorical context you and looking at the author’s purpose you are able to understand more. I liked the parts regarding writing to understand and writing to learn.  Reading and understanding has always been one of my weaknesses but I really liked the technique of “preparing to read, reading initially and rereading.” This made sense to me because I never really think about the piece before I actually read I just begin reading even before I know what the piece is about. One technique I was a little confused about is spot reading. I feel like anytime I read I spot read. I don’t actually read between the lines to get to the complete dept of the purpose of the piece. I think the main thing I am confused about is when spot reading is actually good to use.